Wednesday 6 August 2014

Holidays

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SURFACE FEATURES
Spells most words correctly.
Uses capital letters, full stops, commas, apostrophes, question marks, exclamation marks.
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Yus It’s the holidays and time to relax but not in my house. This is what I mean but... there are good bits too.


‘Come on Call’ says dad. 
‘What for?’ I say. 
‘Look outside.’ So I look outside. The whole family was working in the garden. Even my dog was helping, so I went out for a couple of hours. Then I went back  in.

The next day.
Now I have to go for a run because I'm training for cross country so I go and run round the orchard four times every day .

Mum and dad tricked me and said ‘Go to town with dad.’ so I went to town and dad took me to see Transformers Four Age of Extinction. Yay!!!!  I think it was two hours and forty six minutes but it was worth it and it was awesome!!!.


And it gets better.
Me and my family went for dinner at the Lone Star.


Thats all we did in the holidays.

Monday 4 August 2014

Super Squid Wow Words


New Zealand Flag Facts


Qunicy Pondexter

A moment in time...


                                  Sleep Just Sleep


I saw the shadow of my dad running back to the tv to watch the rugby.
I saw  the darkness that looks like a never ending hole.
I heard  the flax bush rattle.
I heard the tv blasting out rubbish.
I felt the soft warm blankets surround me.
I felt as if I was lying by the fire.
I wondered if I would  just fall through my bed.
I wondered if I was floating through a river.

Stoney Creek Ranch Camp